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PostSubject: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 8:00 am

Changed title - Now you can write stories on anything that is CosmicBreak related!

Alright guys, How about writing a backstory for a CosmicBreak bot who doesn't have a backstory yet? I think it will be fun!

I have even wrote my own, It serves as the Backstory of Mecha Jetter Girl, Mecha Jetter and Soljetter. I was so excited to show you guys this idea of a good story I had kept in my head for nearly two months! Enough to make me skip a shower or two, and cry real tears to write this for you guys! So here it is, enjoy! (Please prepare the tissues, It's a tragic love story)

NOTE: THE PREVIOUS VERSION OF THE STORY IS IN WOLF HIKARI'S POST, IF YOU WANT TO READ IT.
NOTE: THIS STORY IS FICTION, THE TRUE STORY IS THAT LUKE SURVIVED.
The Legacy of Luke Aerius:
 

Edit - Fixed a lot of errors in grammer and punctuation
Edit - Added explanation for the Booby window in Mecha Jetter Girl's suit
Edit - Added more suspense for a more interesting read
Edit - Improved story Consistency
Edit - Added Suicide attempt, and a mushy marriage scene. (Still need a few tweaks)
Edit - Made the mushy marriage scene far less mushy. Making it much more comfortable to read. Shortened the Dialogue with Luke telling me to not suicide


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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 8:38 am

Hurray it's LXE's Story telling taimu!

I <3 Stories :3

oh wait what?
Winbell x Luke? (pink hair)
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 8:47 am

@Nisa wrote:
Hurray it's LXE's Story telling taimu!

I <3 Stories :3

oh wait what?
Winbell x Luke? (pink hair)

I didn't know which colour to think of, so I chose pink. The story is about Alexis Aerius the Mecha Jetter Girl, NOT WINBERRL!!!

Anyways I made a few adjustments so the story should run a lot smoother now. NOW NISA, PLEASE READ IT AGAIN!!!

As for where I got the name "Luke", read the CosmicBreak Mangas in the Fansite Kit.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:00 am

Nisa Approves.

Btw Alexis,when did you find a new husbando?
she looks so happy in every MJG pic O.o
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:05 am

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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:13 am

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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:16 am

@Nisa wrote:
Nisa Approves.

Btw Alexis,when did you find a new husbando?
she looks so happy in every MJG pic O.o
You can hide a lot of pain, agony and suffering behind a beautiful and warm smile...
I also had to come up with a better name than LXE. So I went with LXS.
Did you know that the full name "Alexis Aerius" can be written in English wordplay as "LXS RES"?
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:27 am

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its so beautiful ;]
*shots himself* x__x
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 1:17 pm

LXE wrote:
Alright guys, How about writing a backstory for a CosmicBreak Moe Bot Girl who doesn't have a backstory yet? I think it will be fun!

I have even wrote my own, It serves as the Backstory of Mecha Jetter Girl, Mecha Jetter and Soljetter. I was so excited to show you guys this idea of a good story I had kept in my head for nearly two months! Enough to make me skip a shower or two, and cry real tears to write this for you guys! So here it is, enjoy! (Please prepare the tissues, It's a tragic love story)
Spoiler:
 

Luke is the name of the lieutenant Mecha Jetter in the story "The Strongest Wings In The World" I suppose.
Not to mention it is you create it all the fan stuff. nice story anyway. ^ᴥ^


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its so beautiful ;]
*shots himself* x__x

What the... affraid
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sat Mar 05, 2011 6:31 pm

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Luke is the name of the lieutenant Mecha Jetter in the story "The Strongest Wings In The World"

Yup, and "Aerius" is latin for "Aerial".
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 12:30 am

@Idontlive wrote:
FunThingsAreFun wrote:
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I lol'd.

oh and did MJG's story just get longeR?
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:08 am

@Nisa wrote:
oh and did MJG's story just get longeR?

Yeah, I'm not quite finished with it.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:15 am

LXE wrote:
@Nisa wrote:
oh and did MJG's story just get longeR?

Yeah, I'm not quite finished with it.
tell me when ur done :3
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:35 am

@Nisa wrote:
LXE wrote:
@Nisa wrote:
oh and did MJG's story just get longeR?

Yeah, I'm not quite finished with it.
tell me when ur done :3
I don't know, it is done but it is not done at the same time.
I'm still trying to fix up mistakes here and there.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:46 am

OKIES, DIE DIE DIE

Cannonballer lol:
 
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 6:58 am

Zero Saber Girl

In My Mind:
 

How was that? ^ᴥ^

*EDIT: I made some word correction


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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 7:16 am

Just a few more grammar checks:

away, with all of the strength. I ripped out all the tubes which... - should be: "...with all the strength, I ripped out all the tubes..."
it sould be a comma not a dot

forest to buru the ashes of burn - BURU the ashes? should be: "BURY the ashes"

All in all, its good. I guess the "SPARK" came from the phrase: "A girl who loved mecha Jetter so much..."

You really explored the LOVE there huh?
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 7:21 am

@Wolf Hikari wrote:
How was that? ^ᴥ^

Grammer mistakes, Grammer mistakes everywhere... =.=; (That I can help you fix up)
And as for suspense, I have to rate it at 3/5. You need to add more detail.

But the only thing I can't do is, add to the story. The story is yours, not mine. So the only thing I can help you with is your expression.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 7:27 am

and everyone ignored poor cannonballer.

Poor cannonballer.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 8:05 am

/人‿‿人 \

I'm kinda high in writing this so please pardon the grammar errors and lack of storyline. This will probably be the summarized version. Not gonna stretch it too far... Sorry if there are no fight scenes in this one.

IZUNA KAMUI NAGI


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I hope all of you enjoyed this back story of Izuna Kamui Nagi. I inserted my original character since i do not know what to name him. Thanks for reading and don't forget to comment as well~

Extra materials to read up if u dunno what am i typing. Also, i tweaked the use of the kuji-in a little...

Kuji-in (original) of what Kamui is doing - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kuji-in

Kokkuri-san - Something like the Ouija Board in Japan - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kokkuri_%28game%29


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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 8:50 am

@necrio wrote:
OKIES, DIE DIE DIE

Cannonballer lol:
 

Epic....just epic Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 9:07 am

LXE wrote:
@Wolf Hikari wrote:
How was that? ^ᴥ^

Grammer mistakes, Grammer mistakes everywhere... =.=; (That I can help you fix up)
And as for suspense, I have to rate it at 3/5. You need to add more detail.

But the only thing I can't do is, add to the story. The story is yours, not mine. So the only thing I can help you with is your expression.

I know, I still have much mistakes in that. But hey, what do I get? An Improvement to be better! :D
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 10:46 am

@ironpen27 wrote:
@necrio wrote:
OKIES, DIE DIE DIE

Cannonballer lol:
 

Epic....just epic Very Happy
Thankies Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 10:56 am

@necrio wrote:
@ironpen27 wrote:
@necrio wrote:
OKIES, DIE DIE DIE

Cannonballer lol:
 

Epic....just epic Very Happy
Thankies Razz

NECRIO IS DA WINNAR!

need's to be longer though
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PostSubject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination   Sun Mar 06, 2011 10:58 am

@Nisa wrote:
@necrio wrote:
@ironpen27 wrote:


Epic....just epic Very Happy
Thankies Razz

NECRIO IS DA WINNAR!

need's to be longer though
I always fail at making long essays / stories / whatever, one of the few reasons I suck at forum roleplaying Razz
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